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Another Babylon

Vlanes
In the early hours I unlid my eyes
and slide the sun and the moon into their places;
by the oscillation of my pupils
I wind up birds in the garden,
making them flap their wings and sing;

by the breath in my lungs
I pump a cool gust over my Babylon;
by my aroused virility
I erect a throbbing ziggurat
that mindlessly probes the manifold air;

the pulsation of my awakening heart
populates my Babylon with shouting people
stirs up commotion at market-squares
and fills millions of baskets with clotted light;

by my cough, to clear my throat,
I send out an army of mercenaries
with plume-crowned horses, swanlike chariots
and pompous generals, to conquer more land;

by the pain I feel remembering my woman
I create all the love-stories in my Babylon:
the wretched lovers separated by their families,
and the happy ones, ever reliving their first days;

by my fantasies I permeate my Babylon
with mythologies and syncretic beasts
who climb up Ishtar's gates towards heaven
and lick the sun with their forked tongues.

By the time I get up, my Babylon is essentially complete,
all that it needs is a sense of mortality. There must be a limit
even to my Babylon, for limitless life is the same
as death, so I close my eyelids from time to time
and cast brief nights over hot rooftops and lion-faced ledges:
it is not really death, but it is the best I can manage.


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By the rivers of Babylon, inconsolably weeping
Didst I seat watching my brethren driven to bondage…
Thither was shown token of Heaven, as clouds did part
At the stroke of midnight, by His will and His grace,
Lightning did piece the skies smiting oppressors…
Thus wert my brethren divinely delivered
To rejoice by Naharim Yahrushalayim...

Мге   03.10.2010 01:37     Заявить о нарушении правил
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Correction - Didst I sit...

Мге   03.10.2010 03:10   Заявить о нарушении правил
Thank you very much for such an elegant rendering.

Vlanes   04.10.2010 00:11   Заявить о нарушении правил
Dear Sage, it stands to reason that each one of us has this Babylon. To some it is a place of inner conquest, immense spiritual might or majesty. To me it is a place of self-imposed spiritual exile of sorts. As I was pondering a response to your poem, I've thought of countless generations of my ancestors who spent time as slaves in vast Babylonian prisons... For them seeing Naharim Yahrushalaim (rivers of Jerusalem), meaning more like rivers of their home, like Jordan or Kedron, was the sight on freedom and homecoming.
Sincerely,
Mithrandir

p.s.:Another correction: "...lightning did pierce..."

Мге   04.10.2010 01:55   Заявить о нарушении правил
Thank you. Yes, of course, Babylon is also a metaphor. Perhaps, the most fundamental metaphor behind every image which tries to pinpoint man's location within the world of phenomena. I think you are a Sage, not I.

Vlanes   04.10.2010 23:23   Заявить о нарушении правил
You might find it amusing, but every morning I actually travel on the Long Island Rail Road train, on the Babylon line, though I switch midway to another train.:))) So, as you can see, I am never far from Babylon (station).:) New York was also named as the metaphorical Babylon, so you can’t really get away from this… Nor would I try, for to know the meaning of true freedom (to really appreciate it) one must first experience thralldom. Thus, for me Babylon is that necessary step that leads toward Jerusalem (the symbol of freedom).
My dear colleague, I count you among my Teachers and for that reason I named you a Sage (not as a rank, or title, but as the sign of outmost reverence and respect). Some names are taken and some are given, for I too have not always been Mithrandir, but was given that name by my friend….
Ever at thy service,
Mithrandir

Мге   05.10.2010 04:48   Заявить о нарушении правил
All right, thank you very much. You have one of the best names there are.

Vlanes   05.10.2010 23:23   Заявить о нарушении правил
I am sorry if my words made you somewhat uncomfortable, but they were sincere. As for my name-pseudonym, I am trying to be worthy of it, though it is, admittedly, an impossible task. Still, as once it was once said, though we may never reach stars they can still guide us on the path to beauty.
Sincerely,
Mithrandir (The Grey Pilgrim)

Мге   07.10.2010 04:41   Заявить о нарушении правил
No, not at all. I am always very happy to receive your most perceptive reviews and thoughts.

Vlanes   10.10.2010 10:54   Заявить о нарушении правил
Thank you...

Мге   19.10.2010 06:02   Заявить о нарушении правил
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