1. In the darkness of the mysterious space
all stars shine but their shine is not as bright
as the shine of eyes of people of your race (три OF в одном предложении?)
no doubt I know that I'm right.
Chor:
What a beautiful game, my hero!
But your starship've just passed by.
See: i stay in the middle of nowhere,
cause u've gone and didn't say good bye. (сочетание времен?)
2. Yes, I know, you have no feelings,
cause emotions don't suit you well.
But I beg you notice my tears (или там должен быть инфинитив: to notice?)
Maybe it will ring with you a bell. (можно ли дробить идиому таким образом?)
Ch.
3. Even icy stones melt in april,
so i hope your heart gets warmer too.
please, believe me and you'll be able
to feel love and happiness soon.
What a beautiful game, my hero!
But your starship've just passed by.
Stay with me in the middle of nowhere,
I will teach your soul how to fly.